demande de correction en anglais

[95sisi]

Bonsoir,
J'ai deux sujet a faire en anglais, je les ai fait mais j'aimerais bien que vous regardiez si j'ai fait des fautes ou pas. Si je n'ai pas le droit de poster un truc de ce genre je m'excuse d'avance .

1) I would like to visit Dubai because it's an amazing city. if i go there the first thing i would see is Palm Islands. Palm Islands is an island in the shape of palm, almost entirely built on sand brought in enormous quantities.
Furthermore Dubai is a city where criminal acts are forbidden, we can live with freedom. So after my studies i will settle in Dubai and get a good job well paid and to form my family: i want my children to be grown in a secure city without any danger.
And if i don't have a chance to find a job there, i'll go there just to visit at least. It's a city where it is warm and nice with many beaches...good to have some sunbath.

2)Why do people travel?

There are many reasons. First some people travel for financial reasons .In fact a lot of people travels abroad and generally to the countries of the north as France to have a better work. Indeed people travel because they want to see their families and their friends who live far away. I’m one of those people because every year I visit my family in Morocco.

Another important reason why people travel is to experience another culture or learn another language. For example a lot of French people travel in England to improve their English.

Apart from the language many young people travel abroad and generally in the United States and in England to enter in a better school as Oxford or Harvard

Merci d'avance

[noelnadal]

Je ne suis pas un référence en correction d'anglais mais voilà :

Bonsoir,
J'ai deux sujet a faire en anglais, je les ai fait mais j'aimerais bien que vous regardiez si j'ai fait des fautes ou pas. Si je n'ai pas le droit de poster un truc de ce genre je m'excuse d'avance .

1) I would like to visit Dubai because it's an amazing city. If I go there the first thing I would see is Palm Islands. Palm Islands is an island in the shape of palm, almost entirely built on sand brought in enormous quantities.
Furthermore Dubai is a city where criminal acts are forbidden, we can thus live with freedom. So after my studies I will settle in Dubai and get a good job well paid and to form my family: I want my children to be grown in a secure city without any danger.
And if I don't have a chance to find a job there, I'll go there just to visit at least. It's a city where it is warm and nice with many beaches... good to have some sunbath.

2)Why do people travel?

There are many reasons. First some people travel for financial reasons. In fact a lot of people travels] abroad and generally to the countries of the north as France to have a better work. Indeed people travel because they want to see their families and their friends who live far away. I’m one of these people because every year I visit my family in Morocco.

Another important reason why people travel is to experience another culture or learn another language. For example a lot of French people travel in England to improve their English.

Apart from the language many young people travel abroad and generally in the United States and in England to enter in a better school as Oxford or Harvard.

Merci d'avance

J'ai pas corrigé le français.
Attention j'ai sûrement loupé des trucs.

[95sisi]

ok merci

[noelnadal]

De rien.
Surtout oublie pas : le "je" anglais (I) est toujours en majuscule : I think I am good for calculator programming because I can do all what I want with it.

[Adriweb]

J'améliore le texte de noelthebest :

Bonsoir,
J'ai deux sujet a faire en anglais, je les ai fait mais j'aimerais bien que vous regardiez si j'ai fait des fautes ou pas. Si je n'ai pas le droit de poster un truc de ce genre je m'excuse d'avance .

1) I would like to visit Dubai because it's an amazing city. If I go there, the first thing I would see is Palm Islands. Palm Islands is an island shaped like a palm, almost entirely built on sand brought in enormous quantities.
Moreover, Dubai is a city where criminal acts are forbidden, thus we can live freely/peacefully. So, after my studies I will settle in Dubai, get a well paid, good job and start a family: I want my children to grow in a safe city without any dangers.
And if I don't have the chance to get a job there, I'll at least go there to visit. It's a city where the weather is nice and warm, and with many beaches... good to have some sunbath.


2)Why do people travel?

There are many reasons. First some people travel for financial reasons. In fact a lot of people travels] abroad and generally to the countries of the north as France to have a better work. Indeed people travel because they want to see their families and their friends who live far away. I’m one of these people because every year I visit my family in Morocco.

Another important reason why people travel is to experience another culture or learn another language. For example a lot of French people travel in England to improve their English.

Apart from the language many young people travel abroad and generally in the United States and in England to enter in a better school as Oxford or Harvard.

Merci d'avance